I Count My Blessings - revised & again!
I Count my BlessingsI do, I count my blessings every dayand have done since I found this dear old place -its charming, and I love the iron lacealong the front. Yes, everythings the wayId hoped my home...
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Hello Jude.I think this is beautifully written and delightful.The flow is clear and natural, and the closing is excellent.If I had a suggestion, it would be to take another look at L8, which does...
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Jude,Clever! I love surprise endings, and you're really good at setting them up.I think I would have enjoyed this more, though, with sharper rhymes in the octave. Maybe this is an established rhyme...
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Thank you Mary & David for reading my sonnet.David, did I really give it away? I meant only to "show the knife" as the writers of detective yarns say... I may have to be more subtle!Mary, thanks...
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Jude,Okay, not confusing, but I still maintain that the octave gives the impression of only two sets of slant rhymes, which is a turnoff for me. Few react as I do, I know, but it is a strong reaction...
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Jude,I found this light and breezy and amusing and I suppose I did twitch a little at the similarity of eep and eet but there we are.'Showing the knife' is an interesting point and one at which the...
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Hi Mary - your reaction bothers me, because envelope rhyme is one of my favourite schemes, both to read and to write. And also because I don't like, and never use slant rhyme. I wonder why it jarred...
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Jude,I know you didn't intend them as slant rhymes -- I just meant that the similarity of vowel sounds, in my opinion, weakens the rhymes to the extent that it spoils the effect (as does slant rhyme,...
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It gave Peter "a twitch" too Mary... I think I'll have to change it. I am so glad you mentioned it because it's something I didn't think of at all! One of my own rules is, if it's intrusive, get rid...
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Dear Peter, I have a picture of you drooling and twitching... are you sure you enjoyed it? Seriously, thank you heaps for reading and for your supportive comments. I will change the line endings where...
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Jude,I only know when something doesn't quite set right with me, but can seldom take credit for knowing the precise reason. It was the inimitable Museeker who first nailed down this concept of...
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Wow, look at all the activity that takes place in such a short time on this board!Thoroughly enjoyed your homespun tale, Jude!I guess it's now Monday morning in your time zone, and you'll be dropping...
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Uh-oh! Thanks for pointing that out ... I didn't pay enough attention to the sestet, did I? Hmmm, back to the ole keyboard... *sigh* (that's the one you heard Lary!) Regards, Jude
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Hi again, Jude...Works fine for me!BTW, I think I just had a small epiphany....(could end up being a poem, heh heh!)....Thinking how, here I am - Sunday night approaching, waiting for spring to touch...
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Jude,Just popping back in to have one vote counted. I liked it before. I LOVE it now!Mary
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